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Makeover Monday #2 / 11.23.09

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  1. carolee

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    The idea for today's revision activity combines tips from Therese and Donna.

    Read one of your poems out loud to someone (yes, really). Ask that person to recall one line or phrase. Use that line as the opening of a new piece.

    If you're afraid to read to someone or no one is available to you when you're ready to write, feel free to select the line on your own. If you'd like it to be random, close your eyes and point. Use the line your finger touches to start your new poem.

    What to do after you've written ...

    1. Post a blog entry with the poem the line originally appeared in, the new poem and anything you'd like to say about your process.

    2. Leave the link* in this forum anytime this week, November 23-29.

    3. Visit the work of your fellow Revisionaries!

    *if you don't have a blog, feel free to post text directly into the forum.

    NOTE: So far, the activities for Revisionaries have resulted in brand new pieces resembling their sources not at all. We'll also be doing activities that are less revolutionary. Never fear!

    Posted 9 months ago #
  2. carolee

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    i'm settling in to work on my revision soon. i was out all day and then had to deal with one of the boys having been to the principal's office, help another with algebra (he's in 5th grade; i'm not ready for this!) and a third having multiple tantrums. i even had to make my own coffee instead of going out to get some. sheesh! to the poet, the world is always unjust! :)

    Posted 9 months ago #
  3. carolee

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    ok! i started a new poem with a line from an old one. it's at "i am maureen" here

    http://maureenpoetryblog.wordpress.com/2009/11/23/mad-at-my-muse-4/

    message me if you don't already have the password!

    Posted 9 months ago #
  4. Hi, I am going to have to do this tomorrow or the next day. I wanted to get to it today but couldn't.

    Posted 9 months ago #
  5. barbara_y

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    It's a little weak, but not too bad
    http://briarcat.wordpress.com/2009/11/23/makeover_monday2/

    Posted 9 months ago #
  6. Oh, I found one! It was on my site as of this morning, but I didn't think about it being a revision. The final version is in the post, and the first draft is in the comments for the post.

    http://mygorgeoussomewhere.org/2009/11/23/and-your-voice-in-these-tangled-wires/

    Posted 9 months ago #
  7. (I didn't follow the rules, but at least I did something.)

    Posted 9 months ago #
  8. carolee

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    barbara and dana -- i'm so happy to see you! i thought this week i'd be dancin' with my-se-elf, dancin' with my-se-elf, oh, oh, oh-oh! :)

    Posted 9 months ago #
  9. Mallery

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    Here's my revision of the week: Bird Body

    Posted 9 months ago #
  10. carolee

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    mallery -- that's a great example of how powerful a second look at a piece can be. you did the hard work of finding the fluff and getting rid of it! i hope everyone goes to take a peek.

    Posted 9 months ago #

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