Comments on: get your poem on #90 http://readwritepoem.org/blog/2009/09/03/get-your-poem-on-90/ Mon, 03 May 2010 01:01:02 -0500 http://wordpress.org/?v=abc hourly 1 By: Erin http://readwritepoem.org/blog/2009/09/03/get-your-poem-on-90/comment-page-1/#comment-8529 Erin Mon, 07 Sep 2009 01:50:32 +0000 http://readwritepoem.org/?p=6003#comment-8529 Last but not least? I've been on vay-cay, but managed to finally write to last week's prompt: http://freckledwriter.blogspot.com/2009/09/flame-throwing.html Last but not least? I’ve been on vay-cay, but managed to finally write to last week’s prompt:

http://freckledwriter.blogspot.com/2009/09/flame-throwing.html

]]> By: Therese Broderick http://readwritepoem.org/blog/2009/09/03/get-your-poem-on-90/comment-page-1/#comment-8528 Therese Broderick Sun, 06 Sep 2009 23:35:22 +0000 http://readwritepoem.org/?p=6003#comment-8528 Marian, I love the poignancy of the title "We were Tourists once…and young." As a traveler, I, too, was once an innocent tourist, filled with almost childlike wonder at scenes like the one you describe here so very well. Looking back now (as the title of this poem suggests), I am less innocent about the underbelly of the tourism industry. The songs of innocence become the songs of experience (your street sweeper so like the chimney sweeper of William Blake). Well-done. Marian, I love the poignancy of the title “We were Tourists once…and young.” As a traveler, I, too, was once an innocent tourist, filled with almost childlike wonder at scenes like the one you describe here so very well. Looking back now (as the title of this poem suggests), I am less innocent about the underbelly of the tourism industry. The songs of innocence become the songs of experience (your street sweeper so like the chimney sweeper of William Blake). Well-done.

]]> By: Donna Vorreyer http://readwritepoem.org/blog/2009/09/03/get-your-poem-on-90/comment-page-1/#comment-8523 Donna Vorreyer Sun, 06 Sep 2009 18:59:43 +0000 http://readwritepoem.org/?p=6003#comment-8523 This post is now tagged as private - please use the password readwritepoem to access the page. Thanks! Donna http://djvorreyer.wordpress.com/2009/09/03/readwritepoem-90-fire-image This post is now tagged as private – please use the password
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]]> By: Nathan http://readwritepoem.org/blog/2009/09/03/get-your-poem-on-90/comment-page-1/#comment-8501 Nathan Sat, 05 Sep 2009 14:37:33 +0000 http://readwritepoem.org/?p=6003#comment-8501 I also like the rhythm of this piece. Your images are varied and nicely detailed -- and I really love "mournful love songs to the sun." I also like the rhythm of this piece. Your images are varied and nicely detailed — and I really love “mournful love songs to the sun.”

]]> By: Barbara http://readwritepoem.org/blog/2009/09/03/get-your-poem-on-90/comment-page-1/#comment-8500 Barbara Sat, 05 Sep 2009 14:07:21 +0000 http://readwritepoem.org/?p=6003#comment-8500 I like that there's a sort of breathless immediacy that goes with the festival atmosphere. Bursts of impression and speculation. Then the final stanza's slower paced and thoughtful. Nice. I like that there’s a sort of breathless immediacy that goes with the festival atmosphere. Bursts of impression and speculation. Then the final stanza’s slower paced and thoughtful. Nice.

]]> By: Paul Oakley http://readwritepoem.org/blog/2009/09/03/get-your-poem-on-90/comment-page-1/#comment-8487 Paul Oakley Fri, 04 Sep 2009 22:26:35 +0000 http://readwritepoem.org/?p=6003#comment-8487 A little late, but here's mine, titled <a href="http://innerlight-radiantlife.blogspot.com/2009/09/countdown-to-redemption.html" rel="nofollow">FOUNDATIONAL MYTHS</a>. A little late, but here’s mine, titled FOUNDATIONAL MYTHS.

]]> By: marian veverka http://readwritepoem.org/blog/2009/09/03/get-your-poem-on-90/comment-page-1/#comment-8486 marian veverka Fri, 04 Sep 2009 20:39:44 +0000 http://readwritepoem.org/?p=6003#comment-8486 We were Tourists once…and young We’ve found a carnival! The street blossoms with colored lights! And filled with people – Is this street always filled with people? A few moments ago we ran into a shop to escape the rain The raindrops were so heavy it was like standing beneath a Waterfall Now everyone is outside again – we splash through puddles Of green, red, amber, See, the sky is clearing. The clouds gather to say good-by behind The volcano See, in the east a few stars are shining dimly Through the haze of the city. Three musicians stand on the roof of a car. There is a horn A guitar and an accordian As they play, the colors rise and fall to the beats of the music Now there is a great cheering! We try to see what is going on But all we see are cascades of dancing colors Quick! Look! We clap our hands It is the magnificent fire eater, rising over the heads of the people Savoring his marvelous flame! How he dances with the brightness Flaring out just ahead of him Will he really swallow it? He opens his mouth and Tongues of fire dance away. The music plays louder But not as loud as the cheers of the people Does he dance across an invisible wire Strung from building to building? Does he ride a unicycle or a dragon? Are we the victims of a grand illusion – Or have we had too much to drink? All night long, we see the air dancing with magic colors. In the morning we awaken to the sound of the Street-sweepers singing mournful love songs To the sun. We were Tourists once…and young

We’ve found a carnival! The street blossoms with colored lights!
And filled with people – Is this street always filled with people?
A few moments ago we ran into a shop to escape the rain
The raindrops were so heavy it was like standing beneath a
Waterfall
Now everyone is outside again – we splash through puddles
Of green, red, amber,
See, the sky is clearing. The clouds gather to say good-by behind
The volcano See, in the east a few stars are shining dimly
Through the haze of the city.

Three musicians stand on the roof of a car. There is a horn
A guitar and an accordian
As they play, the colors rise and fall to the beats of the music
Now there is a great cheering! We try to see what is going on
But all we see are cascades of dancing colors
Quick! Look! We clap our hands
It is the magnificent fire eater,
rising over the heads of the people
Savoring his marvelous flame!
How he dances with the brightness
Flaring out just ahead of him
Will he really swallow it? He opens his mouth and
Tongues of fire dance away. The music plays louder
But not as loud as the cheers of the people
Does he dance across an invisible wire
Strung from building to building?
Does he ride a unicycle or a dragon?
Are we the victims of a grand illusion –
Or have we had too much to drink?

All night long, we see the air dancing with magic colors.
In the morning we awaken to the sound of the
Street-sweepers singing mournful love songs
To the sun.

]]> By: Rallentanda http://readwritepoem.org/blog/2009/09/03/get-your-poem-on-90/comment-page-1/#comment-8479 Rallentanda Fri, 04 Sep 2009 15:18:21 +0000 http://readwritepoem.org/?p=6003#comment-8479 I like your hob nailed boots GT I like your hob nailed boots GT

]]> By: Rallentanda http://readwritepoem.org/blog/2009/09/03/get-your-poem-on-90/comment-page-1/#comment-8477 Rallentanda Fri, 04 Sep 2009 14:59:36 +0000 http://readwritepoem.org/?p=6003#comment-8477 Hello Derrick Cynthia asked me if the fire eater was a Scot because he wore a skirt.I said I thought so but I would check with you as well. Hello Derrick
Cynthia asked me if the fire eater was a Scot
because he wore a skirt.I said I thought so but I would check with you as well.

]]> By: Rallentanda http://readwritepoem.org/blog/2009/09/03/get-your-poem-on-90/comment-page-1/#comment-8473 Rallentanda Fri, 04 Sep 2009 13:44:48 +0000 http://readwritepoem.org/?p=6003#comment-8473 I love that Johnny Cash song.You've created a hot mood Wayne. I love that Johnny Cash song.You’ve created a hot mood Wayne.

]]> By: Rachel Barenblat http://readwritepoem.org/blog/2009/09/03/get-your-poem-on-90/comment-page-1/#comment-8472 Rachel Barenblat Fri, 04 Sep 2009 13:44:23 +0000 http://readwritepoem.org/?p=6003#comment-8472 Integrating this week's prompt with this week's Torah portion was a real challenge! So I'm chiming in belatedly with: Inscription http://velveteenrabbi.blogs.com/blog/2009/09/this-weeks-portion-inscription.html Integrating this week’s prompt with this week’s Torah portion was a real challenge! So I’m chiming in belatedly with:

Inscription
http://velveteenrabbi.blogs.com/blog/2009/09/this-weeks-portion-inscription.html

]]> By: rob kistner http://readwritepoem.org/blog/2009/09/03/get-your-poem-on-90/comment-page-1/#comment-8466 rob kistner Fri, 04 Sep 2009 08:31:24 +0000 http://readwritepoem.org/?p=6003#comment-8466 Otherworldly... <a href="http://www.image-verse.com/conjured" rel="nofollow"><i>Conjured</i></a> Otherworldly… Conjured

]]> By: ekswitaj http://readwritepoem.org/blog/2009/09/03/get-your-poem-on-90/comment-page-1/#comment-8458 ekswitaj Fri, 04 Sep 2009 03:12:12 +0000 http://readwritepoem.org/?p=6003#comment-8458 <a href="http://blog.elizabethkateswitaj.net/2009/09/thursday-read-write-poem-2/" rel="nofollow">The Fire Spinner</a> The Fire Spinner

]]> By: David Moolten http://readwritepoem.org/blog/2009/09/03/get-your-poem-on-90/comment-page-1/#comment-8455 David Moolten Fri, 04 Sep 2009 02:20:50 +0000 http://readwritepoem.org/?p=6003#comment-8455 I like the quick tempo and riff like back and forth in this; it has a nice beat and highlights every word, and the words feature nice use of alliteration, slant and full rhyme. David I like the quick tempo and riff like back and forth in this; it has a nice beat and highlights every word, and the words feature nice use of alliteration, slant and full rhyme.

David

]]> By: Cynthia Short http://readwritepoem.org/blog/2009/09/03/get-your-poem-on-90/comment-page-1/#comment-8448 Cynthia Short Thu, 03 Sep 2009 21:53:51 +0000 http://readwritepoem.org/?p=6003#comment-8448 Terrific job as usual! It is like someone from Edwardian England was dropped right into the middle of "Burning Man"! Terrific job as usual! It is like someone from Edwardian England was dropped right into the middle of “Burning Man”!

]]> By: Therese Broderick http://readwritepoem.org/blog/2009/09/03/get-your-poem-on-90/comment-page-1/#comment-8446 Therese Broderick Thu, 03 Sep 2009 20:42:32 +0000 http://readwritepoem.org/?p=6003#comment-8446 "Uncool / writes poetry" is a nice touch! As poets, do we conform or not? “Uncool / writes poetry” is a nice touch! As poets, do we conform or not?

]]> By: Deb Scott http://readwritepoem.org/blog/2009/09/03/get-your-poem-on-90/comment-page-1/#comment-8445 Deb Scott Thu, 03 Sep 2009 20:34:25 +0000 http://readwritepoem.org/?p=6003#comment-8445 Mine is <a href="http://stoneymoss.org/2009/09/03/some-nights/" rel="nofollow"><strong>Some Nights</strong></a>, which loosely responds to the fabulous prompt. (Thanks, Nathan.) (I'm not able to be online much with family still visiting, but I will eventually be by to read you all.) Mine is Some Nights, which loosely responds to the fabulous prompt. (Thanks, Nathan.)

(I’m not able to be online much with family still visiting, but I will eventually be by to read you all.)

]]> By: Linda Fraser http://readwritepoem.org/blog/2009/09/03/get-your-poem-on-90/comment-page-1/#comment-8443 Linda Fraser Thu, 03 Sep 2009 19:45:50 +0000 http://readwritepoem.org/?p=6003#comment-8443 I am sorry that the other connection I put up did not work. This one will and I hope a few of you will come by to share my poem. Thank you. <a href="http://livinginthe easternwoodlands.blogspot.com" rel="nofollow">Living In The Eastern Woodlands</a> My poem is called FIRING UP BUSKERFEST. I am sorry that the other connection I put up did not work. This one will and I hope a few of you will come by to share my poem. Thank you.
Living In The Eastern Woodlands

My poem is called FIRING UP BUSKERFEST.

]]> By: Wayne Pitchko http://readwritepoem.org/blog/2009/09/03/get-your-poem-on-90/comment-page-1/#comment-8441 Wayne Pitchko Thu, 03 Sep 2009 19:12:27 +0000 http://readwritepoem.org/?p=6003#comment-8441 Here is mine...The Rings Of Fire http://www.waynepitchko.blogspot.com Here is mine…The Rings Of Fire
http://www.waynepitchko.blogspot.com

]]> By: gautami tripathy http://readwritepoem.org/blog/2009/09/03/get-your-poem-on-90/comment-page-1/#comment-8436 gautami tripathy Thu, 03 Sep 2009 17:08:07 +0000 http://readwritepoem.org/?p=6003#comment-8436 Liked the alliteration in here! <a href="http://firmlyrooted.blogspot.com/2009/09/geometry-of-fireworks-cuts-into-me.html" rel="nofollow">geometry of fireworks cuts into me</a> Liked the alliteration in here!

geometry of fireworks cuts into me

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