Comments on: get your poem on #88 http://readwritepoem.org/blog/2009/08/20/get-your-poem-on-88/ Mon, 03 May 2010 01:01:02 -0500 http://wordpress.org/?v=abc hourly 1 By: kira4god http://readwritepoem.org/blog/2009/08/20/get-your-poem-on-88/comment-page-1/#comment-8075 kira4god Mon, 24 Aug 2009 21:24:11 +0000 http://readwritepoem.org/?p=4897#comment-8075 The Good and Morbid Tendencies by John Hale how too this atrocious earth we call our own how too the throne of our laborers still laboring to make their own muck and slop find themselves amongst our crew adn to this a pile of shit pursuits as was Dante a man caught in a dream of Hell's haunting waters and streams We are but lowly spiders hanging by but a thread til said twine dismembers and once breaking we are truly dead The fabricaiotn of our such tendnecies is the elaboration and inherited traits that make up our demeanors The Good and Morbid Tendencies
by John Hale

how too this atrocious earth
we call our own
how too the throne of our laborers
still laboring to make their own
muck and slop find themselves amongst our crew
adn to this a pile of shit pursuits
as was Dante a man caught in a dream
of Hell’s haunting waters and streams
We are but lowly spiders hanging by but a thread
til said twine dismembers and once breaking
we are truly dead
The fabricaiotn of our such tendnecies is the elaboration and inherited traits that make up our demeanors

]]> By: rachelleastlikely http://readwritepoem.org/blog/2009/08/20/get-your-poem-on-88/comment-page-1/#comment-8048 rachelleastlikely Sat, 22 Aug 2009 19:40:45 +0000 http://readwritepoem.org/?p=4897#comment-8048 http://rachelsrepositoryofpromptpoetry.blogspot.com/2009/08/my-animals-all-dressed-up-in-frothy.html http://rachelsrepositoryofpromptpoetry.blogspot.com/2009/08/my-animals-all-dressed-up-in-frothy.html

]]> By: Barbara _Y http://readwritepoem.org/blog/2009/08/20/get-your-poem-on-88/comment-page-1/#comment-8025 Barbara _Y Fri, 21 Aug 2009 23:13:13 +0000 http://readwritepoem.org/?p=4897#comment-8025 Not sure my comment took, but I really like this take on spoon. and fork. Not sure my comment took, but I really like this take on spoon. and fork.

]]> By: Rachel Barenblat http://readwritepoem.org/blog/2009/08/20/get-your-poem-on-88/comment-page-1/#comment-8024 Rachel Barenblat Fri, 21 Aug 2009 23:08:02 +0000 http://readwritepoem.org/?p=4897#comment-8024 Alas, I didn't manage to write to the prompt this week! But in case anyone's interested, here's the link to the weekly Torah poem I wrote and posted this week: The place http://velveteenrabbi.blogs.com/blog/2009/08/this-weeks-portion-the-place.html Alas, I didn’t manage to write to the prompt this week! But in case anyone’s interested, here’s the link to the weekly Torah poem I wrote and posted this week:

The place
http://velveteenrabbi.blogs.com/blog/2009/08/this-weeks-portion-the-place.html

]]> By: Wayne Pitchko http://readwritepoem.org/blog/2009/08/20/get-your-poem-on-88/comment-page-1/#comment-8022 Wayne Pitchko Fri, 21 Aug 2009 21:16:00 +0000 http://readwritepoem.org/?p=4897#comment-8022 WOW what a great response to the super words...tryin to read as many as I can. I get/LEARN/enjoy...so much from you all....Lots I don't understand....Like my own....but that never bothers me....GREAT weekend to you alllllll WOW what a great response to the super words…tryin to read as many as I can. I get/LEARN/enjoy…so much from you all….Lots I don’t understand….Like my own….but that never bothers me….GREAT weekend to you alllllll

]]> By: Wanda McCollar http://readwritepoem.org/blog/2009/08/20/get-your-poem-on-88/comment-page-1/#comment-8016 Wanda McCollar Fri, 21 Aug 2009 19:40:12 +0000 http://readwritepoem.org/?p=4897#comment-8016 Anthony North - with 73 responses to your poem, most from people not RWP people, you do not need any further comment from me. For my poem, I got 7 comments from this group, RWP, Anthony. So, what is going on here with you? Anthony North – with 73 responses to your poem, most from people not RWP people, you do not need any further comment from me. For my poem, I got 7 comments from this group, RWP, Anthony. So, what is going on here with you?

]]> By: erindavis http://readwritepoem.org/blog/2009/08/20/get-your-poem-on-88/comment-page-1/#comment-8014 erindavis Fri, 21 Aug 2009 18:41:10 +0000 http://readwritepoem.org/?p=4897#comment-8014 Late again, but here you go: http://freckledwriter.blogspot.com/2009/08/spooning.html Late again, but here you go:

http://freckledwriter.blogspot.com/2009/08/spooning.html

]]> By: Wanda McCollar http://readwritepoem.org/blog/2009/08/20/get-your-poem-on-88/comment-page-1/#comment-8012 Wanda McCollar Fri, 21 Aug 2009 17:22:26 +0000 http://readwritepoem.org/?p=4897#comment-8012 Thank you very, very much, Therese. What a wonderful comment - I'm really overjoyed by your understanding. Are you having trouble leaving a comment on my site, too? Both mine and Wayne's are Google sites, i believe, and they ask for some sort of identity - altho' I have minimized that. Thank you very, very much, Therese. What a wonderful comment – I’m really overjoyed by your understanding.

Are you having trouble leaving a comment on my site, too? Both mine and Wayne’s are Google sites, i believe, and they ask for some sort of identity – altho’ I have minimized that.

]]> By: Wanda McCollar http://readwritepoem.org/blog/2009/08/20/get-your-poem-on-88/comment-page-1/#comment-8011 Wanda McCollar Fri, 21 Aug 2009 17:15:21 +0000 http://readwritepoem.org/?p=4897#comment-8011 Therese, I had a terrible time too, but after several tries I was given a word to identify - which let me leave the comment. Therese, I had a terrible time too, but after several tries I was given a word to identify – which let me leave the comment.

]]> By: Wanda McCollar http://readwritepoem.org/blog/2009/08/20/get-your-poem-on-88/comment-page-1/#comment-8010 Wanda McCollar Fri, 21 Aug 2009 16:12:26 +0000 http://readwritepoem.org/?p=4897#comment-8010 I agree - a good write, Your specific detail and surprising juxtapositions seem effortless, but very witty. I love poems that come together in the end, as does this good poem. I agree – a good write, Your specific detail and surprising juxtapositions seem effortless, but very witty. I love poems that come together in the end, as does this good poem.

]]> By: Therese Broderick http://readwritepoem.org/blog/2009/08/20/get-your-poem-on-88/comment-page-1/#comment-8008 Therese Broderick Fri, 21 Aug 2009 15:32:07 +0000 http://readwritepoem.org/?p=4897#comment-8008 Jessica, I tried to leave a comment on your own blog but couldn't get it to work. So here's my comment--I think you were smart to choose only a few of the prompt words. Poets make choices, and break the rules when necessary. Don't be afraid to let the prompt take you when you need to go. Jessica, I tried to leave a comment on your own blog but couldn’t get it to work. So here’s my comment–I think you were smart to choose only a few of the prompt words. Poets make choices, and break the rules when necessary. Don’t be afraid to let the prompt take you when you need to go.

]]> By: rob kistner http://readwritepoem.org/blog/2009/08/20/get-your-poem-on-88/comment-page-1/#comment-8007 rob kistner Fri, 21 Aug 2009 15:30:35 +0000 http://readwritepoem.org/?p=4897#comment-8007 rallentanda - Cutting, humorous, with an underlying frustration that made it spark knowingly -- good write... ...rob rallentanda –

Cutting, humorous, with an underlying frustration that made it spark knowingly — good write…

…rob

]]> By: lizenslin http://readwritepoem.org/blog/2009/08/20/get-your-poem-on-88/comment-page-1/#comment-8003 lizenslin Fri, 21 Aug 2009 14:10:21 +0000 http://readwritepoem.org/?p=4897#comment-8003 Cynthia- My slow dial-up connection didn't let me leave a comment on your blog, so I figured it best to leave one here... Clever use of words. I like how you applied it to politics. I found diode especially hard. My brain just doesn't get electricity. Cynthia-

My slow dial-up connection didn’t let me leave a comment on your blog, so I figured it best to leave one here…

Clever use of words. I like how you applied it to politics. I found diode especially hard. My brain just doesn’t get electricity.

]]> By: Therese Broderick http://readwritepoem.org/blog/2009/08/20/get-your-poem-on-88/comment-page-1/#comment-8002 Therese Broderick Fri, 21 Aug 2009 14:03:49 +0000 http://readwritepoem.org/?p=4897#comment-8002 Wayne--I tried every which way to leave this comment on your own blog, but couldn't make it work. So here's the comment: "It's clever to combine "hitch" with "hike." I don't think I've yet seen that done in other poems. I also like the contemporary reference to Elizabeth Alexander." Wayne–I tried every which way to leave this comment on your own blog, but couldn’t make it work. So here’s the comment: “It’s clever to combine “hitch” with “hike.” I don’t think I’ve yet seen that done in other poems. I also like the contemporary reference to Elizabeth Alexander.”

]]> By: lizenslin http://readwritepoem.org/blog/2009/08/20/get-your-poem-on-88/comment-page-1/#comment-8001 lizenslin Fri, 21 Aug 2009 13:55:47 +0000 http://readwritepoem.org/?p=4897#comment-8001 Rallentanda - I also like the last lines and how you work in 8-track and diode. Very effective. Rallentanda – I also like the last lines and how you work in 8-track and diode. Very effective.

]]> By: ravenswingpoetry http://readwritepoem.org/blog/2009/08/20/get-your-poem-on-88/comment-page-1/#comment-7999 ravenswingpoetry Fri, 21 Aug 2009 13:41:31 +0000 http://readwritepoem.org/?p=4897#comment-7999 Rallentanda: Whoa! Nicely constructed and a great reminder of why I ditched organized religion...Good write! I love how you used the prompt words. -Nicole Rallentanda:

Whoa! Nicely constructed and a great reminder of why I ditched organized religion…Good write! I love how you used the prompt words.

-Nicole

]]> By: Therese Broderick http://readwritepoem.org/blog/2009/08/20/get-your-poem-on-88/comment-page-1/#comment-7998 Therese Broderick Fri, 21 Aug 2009 13:38:46 +0000 http://readwritepoem.org/?p=4897#comment-7998 Rallentanda--I love the detail about Pa listening to Handel's "Largo." The detail reveals so much about the character of the people: maybe poor in money, but not in deep feeling, not in love for beauty. People can be saved by music. Rallentanda–I love the detail about Pa listening to Handel’s “Largo.” The detail reveals so much about the character of the people: maybe poor in money, but not in deep feeling, not in love for beauty. People can be saved by music.

]]> By: lizenslin http://readwritepoem.org/blog/2009/08/20/get-your-poem-on-88/comment-page-1/#comment-7997 lizenslin Fri, 21 Aug 2009 13:36:32 +0000 http://readwritepoem.org/?p=4897#comment-7997 Derrick- Well-said. Derrick-

Well-said.

]]> By: leatherdykeuk http://readwritepoem.org/blog/2009/08/20/get-your-poem-on-88/comment-page-1/#comment-7988 leatherdykeuk Fri, 21 Aug 2009 08:54:39 +0000 http://readwritepoem.org/?p=4897#comment-7988 What a superb piece. I brings to mind memories of the WI, bickering in the church pre-service. What a superb piece. I brings to mind memories of the WI, bickering in the church pre-service.

]]> By: rob kistner http://readwritepoem.org/blog/2009/08/20/get-your-poem-on-88/comment-page-1/#comment-7987 rob kistner Fri, 21 Aug 2009 06:59:19 +0000 http://readwritepoem.org/?p=4897#comment-7987 I've traveled to dark memories this day. <a href="http://www.image-verse.com/gone-2" rel="nofollow"><i><b>Gone</b></i></a> I’ve traveled to dark memories this day. Gone

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