Comments on: read write prompt #41: bare bones, stripping the work down

By: Jenn

Jenn — Mon, 25 Aug 2008 17:59:11 +0000

I am not _ with _
The _ don’t _ to _
The _ _ the pleasure
Of _ _ to _
I _ _ the _ on my _
But it has not set me free
I am not _ to _
And __ _ _ _ with me.

(Sorry if I am late)
I will post the original in a few days.

By: Dem bones | Stoney Moss

Dem bones | Stoney Moss — Mon, 25 Aug 2008 04:03:30 +0000

[...] poem was a version of Annamari’s, one she stripped to the bone last week and offered up to Read Write Poemers. Thanks, Annamari. I took a few liberties, and hope you don’t mind. Yours is below, as you [...]

By: A~Lotus

A~Lotus — Mon, 25 Aug 2008 00:36:24 +0000

These were quick poems (part of my free writing series) I’ve written during National Poetry Month back in April. You can do either Part iii or v (or both!).

Part iii.
Once, I thought _____ was a _____ _____
barking at us on _____ of a(n) _____
_____ _____ because we _____ its _____
(and I _____ how it got _____ _____,
and if it _____ its _____ _____),
but it was really a _____,
its _____ erect with its _____
_____ing to the _____,
_____ing like a _____
_____ for _____ to _____ to it.

Part v.
Be a _____, arch your _____.
Let _____ quickly _____
around your _____ and _____
at the _____ of your _____.
_____ deep, then _____,
letting _____, _____, _____, and _____
mingle like _____ _____ _____
of a _____
before you _____ into _____
like a _____ _____ from the sky
and getting _____ by the _____
(or a _____ _____).

Hope these two mini-poems amuse someone. And as everyone mentioned, please write before you peek!!

http://alotus-poetry.livejournal.com/3920.html

By: Assent to Darkness « Raven’s Wing Poetry

Assent to Darkness « Raven’s Wing Poetry — Sun, 24 Aug 2008 21:33:10 +0000

[...] to Darkness This week at Read Write Poem, prompt #41 was “Bare Bones – Stripping the Work Down”. We posted skeletons of our poems – stripped down works with some nouns, verbs, and so forth [...]

By: Nicole Nicholson

Nicole Nicholson — Sat, 23 Aug 2008 14:38:13 +0000

Here’s my skeleton:

_______ _______ me
to _____ down ________ _________
___________ dark _________

__________ casts ________
a _________ city ________, ______
___________, the ________

________ out in
the _______ concrete and ________
_____ ______, electric

and ______ ________
______ _______ _________, fragrant, coursing
through _______ ________

_________, ________, madmen
______ ________ _______ women and
high-heeled _________

________, and businessmen
on a secret __________ _________
________ nighttime _______

this _____ _______
________, raw, _______, blood pulse
________ and ______

and I _______
______ ______ all _______ by
a ________ __________

The original is here (do not read until you’ve written your poem):

http://ravenswingpoetry.com/2008/08/10/subway/

By: Christine

Christine — Sat, 23 Aug 2008 02:48:10 +0000

I should add that the above skeleton is a stripped down version of a chop suey poem using slynne’s words, so it’s a double collaboration if someone chooses to work with it.

Here’s a link to her blog:

http://soyouthinkican.wordpress.com

By: Christine

Christine — Sat, 23 Aug 2008 02:41:21 +0000

Lights of __________
________ at your _________,

they’ve _______________
________ you _________
while you ____________
off the___________,

they’ve ____________
your __________ and
____________ with you
on ____________
until you ___________.

They ___________ you,
help you to ___________
your ____________.

They __________ sheen
of your ________________.

Now you lie on a _____________
and ask yourself if
they _____________ or
_______ you into a __________,

until they ___________
into ________________.

By: poetry strips down to (almost) nothing. how hawt is that? : mygorgeoussomewhere.org

Fri, 22 Aug 2008 21:52:59 +0000

[...] August 19, 2008 This sounds like nonsense, you say? Well, allow me to convince you that it’s not. First, the whole… [...]

By: gautami tripathy

gautami tripathy — Fri, 22 Aug 2008 08:58:30 +0000

Hope this works for someone:

brushing ___ wind, they ____
leaving ______ _____
even whirlwinds _____ compete
___ fast ___ they pass __ ___moment
you can only ___ them ___
their massive ____ can ____ you ___
if ___ you let _____ lead by _____

with ____calm ______, you ___ ___
over _____ which _____ like ______
in ____ ____, tightly ______ them ___

By: Bout rimé collaborative poem, and other collaborative projects « maría cristina poesía

Fri, 22 Aug 2008 06:39:57 +0000

[...] If you want to participate, leave a skeleton of your original poem in the comments section of read write poem for others to fill in, kind of like Mad [...]

By: Tiel Aisha Ansari

Tiel Aisha Ansari — Thu, 21 Aug 2008 16:55:56 +0000

This might be a little long for the purpose, so feel free to use any part of it that strikes your fancy. The complete version is here (but you may not want to look at it until later).

Nay, ¬__ me by
thou __ __, thou __ __-__ __!
I will not __ __ __ the __ _ with you.

Abandon is the __ of __,
a __ without __, a __ of no __
where the __ __ is __.
Abandon is a __ __ under an __ __.

Burning is the __ of __,
a __ fragrant with the __ __
__ of __ and __
where fire __ __ __ __ a step _.

Miracle is the __ of __,
where __ __ __ from __ __ and __
like __ __ on __ __.
All the lands of ¬¬__ are the __ of __:

the __-__ __ and __ at every door
on every street
in the __ of __ __
like __ in dark __
beside the __ __ and the __ __
under an __ __!

By: Bones of the earth « Words that sing

Bones of the earth « Words that sing — Thu, 21 Aug 2008 14:34:11 +0000

[...] poem was produced in response to readwritepoem’s challenge to write a poem based on the skeleton of someone else’s. I used a skeleton provided by [...]

By: The fleshed out and improbable skeleton | Stoney Moss

The fleshed out and improbable skeleton | Stoney Moss — Thu, 21 Aug 2008 04:15:39 +0000

[...] this is the fleshy poem I quickly put together so as to strip it for Dana’s RWP prompt this week- think crows on roadkill. No? Okay. Think deciduous tree at the end of autumn [...]

By: Deb

Deb — Thu, 21 Aug 2008 04:07:17 +0000

Improbable ________

______. I’m walking
the _____:
a __________
and _________ ____. A
spoiled ______________
_______ on
my _____
_____. His ____ _____.
A ______ soppy _____.
He _____
me _____ I
wouldn’t __. ______
then _____ at ______
Dirt _____.
Fallen _____
My ______ wags. __
____ to _____ ___.
______ rank
__________.
A ____ snaps. _______.
________ _____ punches
a _____ _____ _____
replacing _______.
____ ___!

I’ll post the fleshy version tonight. You can search “improbable” to find it should you want to.

By: a poem using dave bonta’s poem skeleton* : mygorgeoussomewhere.org

a poem using dave bonta’s poem skeleton* : mygorgeoussomewhere.org — Thu, 21 Aug 2008 03:27:19 +0000

[...] *For details, check out Read Write Poem. [...]

By: Kristin

Kristin — Wed, 20 Aug 2008 23:34:52 +0000

Here’s a skeleton for the closet:

It’s still _ _ _ _ _- still _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _
in this _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _, still _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _
for _ _ _ _ _ _ _

It’s still _ _ _ _ _; I’m not _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _,
_ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ time, _ _ _ _ _ and _ _ _ _ _
and _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _

before _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _, she said _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _

_ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ swam over _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ ,
_ _ _ _ sunlight over a _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _
in _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ paintings -

faint, _ _ _ _ _ _ _ , full _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _
and through _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ summer _ _ _
_ _ _ _ the first songs _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ .

I’ll post the original on my blog tomorrow.

By: Dave

Dave — Wed, 20 Aug 2008 16:13:34 +0000

Great prompt! Here’s one from something I wrote for a RWP prompt a while back:

I was dealt a ______ ______, and _____ed
to do ______ with the ______:
______ ______, _____ing
at a(n) ______’s approach.
I _____ed a _____’s _____ of _____ ______.
Below ______ I have ______ed
the ______ tooth of a ______,
round and ______, and I ______ it
like _____ ______ in my mind,
that _____ _____ trick of _____
and ______ _______
that never quite _____.

By: Nathan

Nathan — Wed, 20 Aug 2008 15:55:33 +0000

Here’s one:

The ____ ____ ____ but
nothing _____. Each ____ ____
____ sit above the _____.
No ____ ____ offers _____
______. No ____ ____ just ____ ____.
The ______ happen like a
_____ ____. Everyday, a succession of
____ _____.
The ______ is _____ like
_______ ______. We
don’t seek ____. We don’t _____.
We only _____ the _____ in the _______.
Each _____ _____ through its _____,
obedient to the _____.

By: lissa

lissa — Wed, 20 Aug 2008 15:16:00 +0000

forgot to leave the link to the original and as Annamari said above, please only read this after you have complete your poem

http://www.justwritingwords.com/2008/06/i-never-thought.html

By: lissa

lissa — Wed, 20 Aug 2008 15:14:07 +0000

here’s mine
~~~~~~~~~~~~

I never _____
of you
as _____ there
in the corner of my life
_____
so close to me

time slowly _____ my days
but I never _____
not in the split seconds of solitude
not in the _____ of _____ insomnia
did I once _____ of you
_____ there

now you’re _____
I never _____
I would _____ someone
who _____ never in _____ _____
until the _____ _____ of _____ life
_____ I ever _____ of
never _____
of you