Comments on: napowrimo: chainpoem

By: napowrimo: celebrate may and back to our regularly scheduled poll dances at Read Write Poem

Thu, 01 May 2008 03:02:22 +0000

[...] gives you the chance to add a line and count it as one of your poems! Find the one in process here. January talks about National Poetry Month and asks, “what are you [...]

By: Beloved Dreamer-Melanie

Beloved Dreamer-Melanie — Mon, 28 Apr 2008 17:47:39 +0000

Being old and one half of a dead couple had made her thin and wiry.

By: jan doble

jan doble — Mon, 21 Apr 2008 19:53:37 +0000

if no-one else wants to contribute, i think the poem looks cool the way it is…even with one line alone at the bottom. maybe you could even include something about the bikini in the title? (just a thought…)

By: jan doble

jan doble — Mon, 21 Apr 2008 16:35:10 +0000

you really could have left that off…somehow the 2 lines you made out of what i sent was really supposed to be 1 line; and the bikini part was to be the last line in the poem (or in that paragraph). But, when you made 2 lines out of the 1 that i sent, i really liked it MUCH better, and realized that it would have been awkward to use it as just 1 line! so then, i was kind of glad you didn’t use the ‘bikini’ line, and my last note to you was pretty much just a joke, a final comment! now that you’ve put the bikini line as the beginning of a new section of the poem, it really WILL be more complicated! i hope people will continue it…otherwise, you can take it off if you want to:) wow…this is a lot to say…sorry it went on so long:)

By: Read Write Poem

Read Write Poem — Mon, 21 Apr 2008 15:03:10 +0000

Hey Jan, I wasn’t quite sure it was a line with the parenthesis. I heard it as commentary since you’d donated a line before that.

Will be interesting to see where this might yet go.

Title ideas, anyone?

By: jan doble

jan doble — Sun, 20 Apr 2008 17:59:16 +0000

Deb,
I guess her bikini fell off!

By: jan doble

jan doble — Fri, 18 Apr 2008 17:13:34 +0000

(and she’s still running around in her bikini)

By: jan doble

jan doble — Fri, 18 Apr 2008 17:12:14 +0000

–but only in her dreams; in the day she’s still smoking those harsh cigarettes and my brother is still seething

By: Beloved Dreamer-Melanie

Beloved Dreamer-Melanie — Tue, 15 Apr 2008 06:07:33 +0000

For tomorrow will never come and the dark night will stay.

I would like to add this line.

love-bd

By: Whirling Dervish

Whirling Dervish — Sun, 13 Apr 2008 17:15:46 +0000

Here’s my line:

Family secrets too late at night are safe in her hands

By: jan doble

jan doble — Sun, 13 Apr 2008 15:35:07 +0000

‘this woman hides herself from her own view, running frantically’

By: Rob Kistner

Rob Kistner — Sat, 12 Apr 2008 19:55:30 +0000

here’s a line:

“kindness in her heart, murder in her veins”

By: jimmmaaa

jimmmaaa — Thu, 10 Apr 2008 07:52:45 +0000

Thanks, Deb. I had fun expanding on the chain. It’s still jangling around in my mind and perhaps I will go back to refine it, although rewriting is not my strong point, yet.

By: NamasteBlue

NamasteBlue — Thu, 10 Apr 2008 04:54:16 +0000

Her optimism cynicisim in a lesser womans hands

By: Skipping the rewrite again… « pro tempore

Skipping the rewrite again… « pro tempore — Thu, 10 Apr 2008 03:57:06 +0000

[...] poetry, National Poetry Month But still did something poetry-related. I contributed to this chain poem over at Read Write Poem. They guaranteed that this counts as a napowrimo/naporewrimo activity, [...]

By: Blythe

Blythe — Thu, 10 Apr 2008 03:49:40 +0000

Her companions: a highball, a nail file, a romance novel

By: ...deb

...deb — Thu, 10 Apr 2008 03:38:04 +0000

I love the way these chain poems build. And I really enjoyed you poem, jimmmmaaa.

By: NamasteBlue

NamasteBlue — Wed, 09 Apr 2008 18:42:00 +0000

she still wears bikinis and lays to sun herself in the front yard

By: jimmmaaa

jimmmaaa — Tue, 08 Apr 2008 20:36:43 +0000

Here’s my poem, Former Wisconsin Beauty Queen that I made from the chain of lines.

By: pepektheassassin

pepektheassassin — Tue, 08 Apr 2008 16:21:25 +0000

so, three husbands and two dogs later