she’s a bit of a strange old bird

i would like to contribute this line to the poem…..

i thought this line might work next.

“with her nest of curly gray hair”

so, three husbands and two dogs later

Here’s my poem, Former Wisconsin Beauty Queen that I made from the chain of lines.

she still wears bikinis and lays to sun herself in the front yard

I love the way these chain poems build. And I really enjoyed you poem, jimmmmaaa.

Her companions: a highball, a nail file, a romance novel

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Her optimism cynicisim in a lesser womans hands

Thanks, Deb. I had fun expanding on the chain. It’s still jangling around in my mind and perhaps I will go back to refine it, although rewriting is not my strong point, yet.

here’s a line:

“kindness in her heart, murder in her veins”

‘this woman hides herself from her own view, running frantically’

Here’s my line:

Family secrets too late at night are safe in her hands

For tomorrow will never come and the dark night will stay.

I would like to add this line.

love-bd

–but only in her dreams; in the day she’s still smoking those harsh cigarettes and my brother is still seething

(and she’s still running around in her bikini)

Deb,
I guess her bikini fell off!

Hey Jan, I wasn’t quite sure it was a line with the parenthesis. I heard it as commentary since you’d donated a line before that.

Will be interesting to see where this might yet go.

Title ideas, anyone?

you really could have left that off…somehow the 2 lines you made out of what i sent was really supposed to be 1 line; and the bikini part was to be the last line in the poem (or in that paragraph). But, when you made 2 lines out of the 1 that i sent, i really liked it MUCH better, and realized that it would have been awkward to use it as just 1 line! so then, i was kind of glad you didn’t use the ‘bikini’ line, and my last note to you was pretty much just a joke, a final comment! now that you’ve put the bikini line as the beginning of a new section of the poem, it really WILL be more complicated! i hope people will continue it…otherwise, you can take it off if you want to:) wow…this is a lot to say…sorry it went on so long:)

if no-one else wants to contribute, i think the poem looks cool the way it is…even with one line alone at the bottom. maybe you could even include something about the bikini in the title? (just a thought…)

Being old and one half of a dead couple had made her thin and wiry.

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